I got a B on my paper. I wanted an A+. I wrote about something that remains very vivid in my mind. The image is so clear and precise. My thoughts and memories are perfectly preserved. My emotions should have been put onto paper perfectly. I should not have made mistakes.
My professor commented:
“Looks great ! Very strong, detailed narrative— Nice weaving of description and reflection— the flashback chronology isn’t quite working— partly because your story is so complicated, and partly because your time indicators need to be stronger— maybe try condensing ? It’s almost a seperate narrative”
My chronology “wasn’t quite working”. I wanted it to work so badly. In my mind, the memory is flawless. But I had writer’s block. I did not know how to best convey such a complicated situation into a piece of writing that had a strict page limit. Why was I so confused ? I still don’t know how I should have conveyed the story. The flashback seemed so perfect, but I didn’t execute it properly. My professor says, “partly because your story is so complicated…” Maybe that is why. It is a complex story.
Maybe it’s something others aren’t meant to understand or see. It is my story. My life.
The most complicated story of my life, put onto paper… And not even the entire story. Only the ending. The tragic ending.
How could anyone understand ?
October 06, 2009, 11:42pm
